Comments on: HELP!!! What can I add or change to this plot so it won’t be cliche or a recycled plot??? http://www.urbanplacemaking.com/urban-meeting-place/help-what-can-i-add-or-change-to-this-plot-so-it-wont-be-cliche-or-a-recycled-plot Fri, 16 Apr 2010 14:21:59 -0400 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.4 hourly 1 By: Really Cool http://www.urbanplacemaking.com/urban-meeting-place/help-what-can-i-add-or-change-to-this-plot-so-it-wont-be-cliche-or-a-recycled-plot/comment-page-1#comment-1920 Really Cool Mon, 15 Mar 2010 15:13:59 +0000 http://www.urbanplacemaking.com/urban-meeting-place/help-what-can-i-add-or-change-to-this-plot-so-it-wont-be-cliche-or-a-recycled-plot#comment-1920 Not to sound like I am trash-talking you, and I know I won't get the best answer because of what I am about to write, but I feel that I have to be honest. It seems like you just jumbled a bunch of plots from different stories together (City of Ember, Harry Potter, etc.) You also seemed to take a lot of cliched ideas (parents are murdered but give her something valuable right before they die, falling in love with the guy you hate, growing up in an orphanage and never getting adopted, lost princess, being hunted down for something given to her that she never thought much of, etc.) Also, the way she discovers the city is kind of weird. Also, you kind of flip flop between real life and magical/sci-fi things. I mean, the mafia hunting down a lost witch princess who lived in the projects, but now lives in a town hidden in a state park? That is kind of confusing. I know this is harsh, but my advice is to go back to the drawing board. Maybe you could re-use a couple of ideas, but really you need something fresh. I know people will try to suck up to you and say, "Ohmigod, that sounds soooo good. I so want to read it!", but I feel that I have to be honest. I only say that kind of stuff when something sounds original and exciting, and your story idea just isn't doing that for me. I really am sorry, but that is just my opinion. Hope I helped! ♥<br><b>References : </b><br> Not to sound like I am trash-talking you, and I know I won’t get the best answer because of what I am about to write, but I feel that I have to be honest. It seems like you just jumbled a bunch of plots from different stories together (City of Ember, Harry Potter, etc.) You also seemed to take a lot of cliched ideas (parents are murdered but give her something valuable right before they die, falling in love with the guy you hate, growing up in an orphanage and never getting adopted, lost princess, being hunted down for something given to her that she never thought much of, etc.) Also, the way she discovers the city is kind of weird. Also, you kind of flip flop between real life and magical/sci-fi things. I mean, the mafia hunting down a lost witch princess who lived in the projects, but now lives in a town hidden in a state park? That is kind of confusing.

I know this is harsh, but my advice is to go back to the drawing board. Maybe you could re-use a couple of ideas, but really you need something fresh.

I know people will try to suck up to you and say, "Ohmigod, that sounds soooo good. I so want to read it!", but I feel that I have to be honest. I only say that kind of stuff when something sounds original and exciting, and your story idea just isn’t doing that for me. I really am sorry, but that is just my opinion.

Hope I helped!

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]]> By: Shelbers http://www.urbanplacemaking.com/urban-meeting-place/help-what-can-i-add-or-change-to-this-plot-so-it-wont-be-cliche-or-a-recycled-plot/comment-page-1#comment-1919 Shelbers Mon, 15 Mar 2010 14:28:59 +0000 http://www.urbanplacemaking.com/urban-meeting-place/help-what-can-i-add-or-change-to-this-plot-so-it-wont-be-cliche-or-a-recycled-plot#comment-1919 Okayy, Ima going to try and answer all ur questions. 1. Dosen't sound hp whatsoever. 2. New (something) (try like closing ur eyes and typing random letters on ur keyboard and play around with it until u find someting cool) 3. Pendent has the power to control the village city town thing. lol. like would make anyone ruler and like all the werewolves, vampires, whatevever. No offence but i sorta agree with the person below me with the whole flip flop thing, you should pick one or the other. Did i forget anything? Hope this helps!<br><b>References : </b><br> Okayy,

Ima going to try and answer all ur questions.

1. Dosen’t sound hp whatsoever.
2. New (something) (try like closing ur eyes and typing random letters on ur keyboard and play around with it until u find someting cool)
3. Pendent has the power to control the village city town thing. lol. like would make anyone ruler and like all the werewolves, vampires, whatevever.

No offence but i sorta agree with the person below me with the whole flip flop thing, you should pick one or the other.
Did i forget anything?
Hope this helps!
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